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Comment by mellowpuma on March 8, 2011 at 8:40pm
Ah yes, now I remember. 
Comment by matthew charles mccosh lutes on March 8, 2011 at 1:06pm

K, I shall posteth..

 

"the name of the new project is "bathroom bros". you want to participate. The power of chrisp compells you. The grand prize might be 3 oz of rice in an old coffee can, or a weekend with richard "bull" moll in puerto rico or a bucket of mystery. with stakes this high how can you not participate? what are you a crazy person who thinks his turds are conspiring against him? because if you don't take part in the fiesta of awesome dudelyness that is this animation project, that will certainly be your fate." - mellowpuma
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Comment by mellowpuma on March 7, 2011 at 8:27pm

? threat ? persuasion ? question mark ? cinnamon ? cannibalistic chipmonk apocalypse ?

Do you mean the message I sent to the group?  I dont remember what I said there, something about a trip to puerto rico with richard mull (bull from night court) as a fake prize, or possibly 1 ounce of rice in an old coffee can, or a  "bucket of mystery".   Did that message go out, cause I dont see it in my sent messages?

Comment by matthew charles mccosh lutes on March 7, 2011 at 7:35am

Thank you for the wonderful introduction of threat/persuasion MP. It is the ONLY way to get results in a world scared to shit in their own backyard..?! I am currently working on some alternate endings with more of a SMACK, CRACK or POP.. Ok, no smack or crack.. just pop. I've also just teamed up with a cameradude/producer who wants to shoot this as well. He's also looking for the same.. a big twist/climax/orgasm/denouement/cliffhanger.. you get the point. And I somewhat agree. I would shoot/animate as is but do believe there is potential for better. IR,I like the limo idea and yes I did forget those ANXIOUS MAN's and RANDOM DUDE's a couple times during the transfer from Final Draft to Word. Today is the day of brainstorm. I'm going to try and have a second draft by tonight/tomorrow so we can get this thing moving forward. Thanks everyone, any effort is much appreciated.. MP any art sample pics yet?? BTW any CRAIG RYAN volunteers ???

Comment by Ian on March 6, 2011 at 4:43pm
To eliminate any confusion just stick with one name.  Going from CRAIG to ANXIOUS MAN back to CRAIG is not necessary and I'm guessing you just forgot to fix it.  The premise is a goldmine but it still needs a funny twist, an unexpected ending would help this.  Wow them in the end.  What if GREGG walks out and gets into a Presidential Limo with American flags on it?  Or what if GREGG hands CRAIG a prototype for the new iShit.  Something crazy at the end, unexpected.  Smoke a bowl and ponder it.
Comment by matthew charles mccosh lutes on March 2, 2011 at 11:15pm

Sorry guys, here's the rest..

 

CRAIG

No. You didn’t... bro! For you to write on my wall, we have to be friends on Facebook. And we, are not friends on Facebook.. Nor are we bros... bro!!!

 

RANDOM DUDE

(mutters)

Yeah we are.

 

CRAIG

So have a good life!!!

 

CRAIG finishes drying his hands and starts to leave.

 

CRAIG (CONT’D)

Weirdo!

 

RANDOM DUDE

(under his breath)

Shouldn’t leave your passwords in your wallet.

 

CRAIG stops in his tracks.

 

CRAIG

What?!?

 

CRAIG immediately checks for his wallet. It’s not there.

 

CRAIG (CONT’D)

What did you just say!?!

 

RANDOM DUDE flushes the toilet.

 

RANDOM DUDE

I said..

 

The bathroom stall door opens.  A tall, scruffy, older man with shades appears holding out a wallet.

 

RANDOM DUDE (CONT’D)

You shouldn’t keep your passwords in your wallet, bro.

 

CRAIG

How the fuck did you get my wallet!?!

 

RANDOM DUDE

Must’ve fell out when you droppin’ a deuce bro.

 

CRAIG

Yeah, sure! You tried to rob me!!!

 

RANDOM DUDE

No. I could have robbed you blind with your little list of passwords in there.

 

CRAIG

Oh, well thanks for going through my wallet then.

 

RANDOM DUDE

Actually, your cards fell out.

 

CRAIG

Yeah, ok, well thanks.. I guess..

 

CRAIG is somewhat relieved but mostly perplexed.

 

RANDOM DUDE

Hey, that’s what bathroom bros are for, right bro.

 

CRAIG

Yeah.. Well, I’m gonna get goin now..

 

CRAIG begins to walk out the door.

 

RANDOM DUDE

Hey..

 

CRAIG

Yes.

 

RANDOM DUDE

Bathroom bros don’t shake hands, bathroom bros gotta hug!!!

 

The brut of a man stands with open arms. CRAIG feels he owes the man something for his honesty and relentlessly moves in for the hug. GREGG holds him like a lost son.

 

RANDOM DUDE (CONT’D)

So... GREG and CRAIG eh...

 

CRAIG

Huh???

 

RANDOM DUDE

It sounds cool.

 

GREG reaches down and genuinely gooses CRAIGS ass pretty hard.

 

CRAIG

What the???

 

GREGG still has CRAIG in a full bearhug. GREGG pats him on the back twice and releases.

 

CRAIG (CONT’D)

Ok, time to go!

 

CRAIG rushes out as he takes one last petrified look at GREGGY WATTS and walks out the door.

 

RANDOM DUDE

Niiiice ass.

 

GREGGY WATTS stares off for a few seconds then shakes his head. He stakes out and re-occupies a new  stall.

 

FADE TO BLACK.

 

 

Comment by matthew charles mccosh lutes on March 2, 2011 at 9:52pm

so here is Bathroom Bros. please give any feedback, good or bad! mellow puma has agreed to animate and i am going to be the voice of random dude(greggy watts), but we still need a voice for craig ryan. please let me know if interested. 

 

INT.  PUBLIC WASHROOMS - PINEVIEW MALL

 

A young, good looking man sporting business casual attire, CRAIG RYAN walks in to the bathroom and enters a stall. He quickly distributes toilet paper around the seat, undoes his pants and sits.

 

CRAIG RYAN

(mutters)

Man, I’m never eating that crap again..

 

CRAIG breathes half a sigh of relief. A scruffy voice echoes from the neighbouring  stall.

 

RANDOM DUDE

 Micky Dee’s bro?

 

CRAIG RYAN

(whispers to himself)

What the?!?

CRAIG doesn’t answer.

 

RANDOM DUDE

Hey bro, you got today’s paper in there?

 

CRAIG RYAN

(whispers to himself)

Bro???

 

CRAIG RYAN (CONT’D)

No.  Sorry.

 

(beat)

 

RANDOM DUDE smashes the wall between them a good hit and hollers at the same time terrifying CRAIG.

 

RANDOM DUDE

(hollers)

Hey!!!

 

RANDOM DUDE (CONT’D)

(angrily)

You don’t have to lie to me eh, bro.

 

CRAIG RYAN

(whispering)

What-the fuck-is going on?!?

 

CRAIG RYAN

Lie to you?!? About what?!?

 

RANDOM DUDE

About the paper.

 

CRAIG(to himself)

What the?!?

RANDOM DUDE reaches into JIM’s stall and snatches a newspaper from beside the toilet.

 

RANDOM DUDE (CONT’D)

See!

 

RANDOM DUDE shakes the paper in front of ANXIOUS MAN in his stall.

 

CRAIG RYAN

What the fuck!?! Who, are..

 

RANDOM DUDE rumbles a boisterous laugh then stops.

 

RANDOM DUDE

Hahahahahaha! D’I scare ya!?

 

CRAIG is too startled to answer.

 

RANDOM DUDE (CONT’D)

It’s alright bro, I ain’t goin anywhere. I’m shittin’ too!

 

CRAIG RYAN

Ok for one, that’s not my newspaper and two, I’m not your bro!

 

RANDOM DUDE

Yeah, Bathroom bros! You never heard?

 

CRAIG

No, I’ve never heard of bathroom bros and truthfully I don’t want to.

 

A bit of silence passes for CRAIG but RD isn’t done yet.

 

RANDOM DUDE

Hey, you got any gum bro?

 

CRAIG

No.

 

RANDOM DUDE

You got any smokes?

 

CRAIG RYAN

No!

RANDOM DUDE

You got any jimmy’s??

 

CRAIG RYAN

What, is a jimmy???

 

CRAIG RYAN (CONT’D)

(to himself)

And why am I still talking to this guy?

 

RANDOM DUDE

Ya know… a condom..  a jimmy.

 

CRAIG

No, I don’t have any gum or smokes and what could you possibly want a condom for right now??

 

RANDOM DUDE

Just somethin bros do.

 

CRAIG

(to himself)

What the hell???

 

Right when CRAIG thinks the man has settled, he swiftly  presents his hand into CRAIG’s stall in handshake form, startling him once again.

 

RANDOM DUDE

CRAIG RYAN, GREGGY WATTS it’s a pleasure.

 

ANXIOUS MAN

Ok how the hell do you know my name bud?!?

 

RANDOM DUDE

Just added you on Facebook..

 

CRAIG is doing up his pants as fast as he can.

 

CRAIG

This is not happening! This is not happening!

 

CRAIG opens the door and bolts to the sink.

 

RANDOM DUDE

I just wrote “bathroom bros 4 life” on your wall, bro.

CRAIG washes his hands quickly.

 

CRAIG

No. You didn’t... bro! For you to wri

Comment by mellowpuma on February 10, 2011 at 10:01pm
Slant,I'll send it as soon as it uploads to my email, (16.7mb) and your email might put it in the junk, because of the large attachment.
Comment by Slant on February 9, 2011 at 5:01pm
MP, just email me the raw video (what you uploaded) so I can score it.
Comment by mellowpuma on February 9, 2011 at 2:58am

wss, would you like to add background sound and music? The original mp3 is up on my page, and I have a multi track audio platform (audacity) and can mix it in.

 

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